Audience Feedback: Second Drafts

As I made more changes, I want to get feedback and see if the changes I was making were working and if they were what my target audience would want to see. Once more, I asked my aunt to give feedback as she is a member of my primary target audience by virtue of being a recently married 27 year old female of the upper middle class. This is the feedback that she gave:


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- Front cover, draft two. 
- I like the content of the sell lines. Think it suits the target audience and the genre very well. However, there's a couple of things to consider here. You could add in a tagline or some additional
information like the publisher or the issue number. You should also move the sell lines down so that they're over the top of the darker green rather than the blue. It'll make them easier to read and more appealing.
- Okay, and the contents page?
- You've made a lot of changes here, wow. The photos work very well together and I do like the picture in the suit. You've clearly added filters to the images to make them fit together and this ties the page together nicely. I also really like the way you've ordered the contents list. It looks a lot more professional. If I had some advice, you could consider putting a gap between the image of the suit and the image of your sister. But that's just an idea.
- What about the article? 
- You've got the rest of the images but you still need to write the article. The images show a well-rounded wedding. They're very romantic and pretty. The layout's quite stunning. This should work well when it's done. 
- And the billboard? 
- This looks better with the additional information. The placement also shows spacial (pronunciation issue in video) awareness so that's a good point.  
- And the website? 
- The looks fuller and more professional. The use of images is also strong. They're high quality. They're lovely. This product works but my only problem is that it doesn't match the rest of your products. It still feels like the odd one out. I feel like you need to make changes to make it fit. 
- Thank you.